A new version of The Whimpering Beach

I’ve produced a new draft of my story: The Whimpering Beach.

As I mentioned before, the story did not seem like a satisfying piece of fiction, so after thinking more about it, I’ve made the following additions:

There is a whole new element, or new layer, added, to do with media fear-mongering, which, in the story implies a similarity between this type of fearfulness, and some aspects of romance; indeed, there is even an implied parallel between acts of terroism and some aspects of the process of falling in love.

The other main difference is that I’ve added more interaction between myself and Rue in the middle sections of the story, to make the fiction more engaging.

Here is a copy of the story with all the main additions highlighted.

Here is the first version.

Here is the final version.

 

14 December 2009